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Critique Work Shop

Posted by Lady Isis on July 26, 2011 at 2:36 PM

Please join us on Thurs. at 7pm EST for our first critique workshop. And continued at 2pm EST on Sat.

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178 Comments

Reply Nicolau de la Croix
3:22 PM on July 30, 2011 
I am with yu Bray...that is when I yank mine out...when all I can think of is little words...HAHAHA
Reply Taryn Laveau (Taz)
3:22 PM on July 30, 2011 
I'm glad to keep things simple as I'm a simple writer.
Reply Larken Nicolescu
3:22 PM on July 30, 2011 
HAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA you too????? Wow...thought that was just me!!!!!!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA

Bray Dalton says...
*Laughing* I have to use my pocket dic and theo. When I write my brain shuts down completely and the only words I can think of are WAS, HAD, THAT, AS.. AND HE, HE, HIS, HIS, HE even when I'm writing about a female..
Reply KittyDiva
3:22 PM on July 30, 2011 
Okay , next timre I come to this workshop, I'm not eating. Too many typoes. But this cassarole is da bomb! LOL
Reply Bray Dalton
3:20 PM on July 30, 2011 
*Laughing* I have to use my pocket dic and theo. When I write my brain shuts down completely and the only words I can think of are WAS, HAD, THAT, AS.. AND HE, HE, HIS, HIS, HE even when I'm writing about a female..
Reply LaVerne
3:19 PM on July 30, 2011 
KittyDiva says...


Know your words. If it's not a word you've ever used in a sentence don't experiment with it now. There isn't a word, okay well maybe certain translations, but in general I don't use words in my writing that I've never used before. Or have a good understanding of.

Kitty's right if you use unfamiliar words sometimes it shows that way in the sentence and doesn't quite convey what you're trying to say. So sometimes simple everyday words are better. And if plebeian is an everyday word for not just you but the character you're writing then use it. One of my favs btw
Reply KittyDiva
3:19 PM on July 30, 2011 
Larken Nicolescu says...
Thanks Kitty...I use it most when I might use the same word over and over like down....use downward.....beautiful....breathtaking...striking....those types...to keep the meaning with just a change of one word. *smiles*....hehehehehehe

Yeah, don?t do this.

Shelia sat in a cornucopia of ski paraphernalia

When you could say:

Shelia was surround by a bunch of skiing jumk
Reply Bray Dalton
3:18 PM on July 30, 2011 
KittyDiva says...
Only if you're trying to make a point.

Bray stood looking at the man and tought to himself, that he wasn't bad looking. In fact, he could se him in his arms on some cold rainy night.

But that wasn't happening since he the man did swing that way.


Claps hands* Thank you, I totally get it now. Its the point. And I need to roll out if Aidan is waiting for me to swing...
Reply Nicolau de la Croix
3:17 PM on July 30, 2011 
yup K-12
Reply Larken Nicolescu
3:17 PM on July 30, 2011 
Thanks Kitty...I use it most when I might use the same word over and over like down....use downward.....beautiful....breathtaking...striking....those types...to keep the meaning with just a change of one word. *smiles*....hehehehehehe

KittyDiva says...
Reply LaVerne
3:15 PM on July 30, 2011 
Marius de Moldavia says...
I was always told never to do that in Catholic school but I am not sure of the actual rule either about "and" and "but"


Marius you too. *grins*
Reply KittyDiva
3:14 PM on July 30, 2011 
Larken Nicolescu says...
*holds up my copy* I have it too and it goes with me everywhere....that and my Pocket Oxford American Dictionary and Thesaurus - Third Edition!!!!! *smiles*

Watch it with the Thesaurus, Sometimes simple words are better. An editor can smell, when some one is useing it.
Reply Nicolau de la Croix
3:12 PM on July 30, 2011 
I was always told never to do that in Catholic school but I am not sure of the actual rule either about "and" and "but"
Reply Larken Nicolescu
3:12 PM on July 30, 2011 
*holds up my copy* I have it too and it goes with me everywhere....that and my Pocket Oxford American Dictionary and Thesaurus - Third Edition!!!!! *smiles*

LaVerne says...
Also this is my personal bible because it's small and easy to carry around but find your own if you don't like this one.

THe Elements of Style by Strunk and White. My husband doesn't like it. lol
Reply Bray Dalton
3:11 PM on July 30, 2011 
*Nods with a fist bump to Larken* I can ask a good question every once in awhile.. *Frowns* I can. STOP LAUGHING!
Reply KittyDiva
3:11 PM on July 30, 2011 
Bray Dalton says...
When is it ok to use AND and BUT at the beginning of a sentence? Is there a rule on that?


Only if you're trying to make a point.

Bray stood looking at the man and tought to himself, that he wasn't bad looking. In fact, he could se him in his arms on some cold rainy night.

But that wasn't happening since he the man did swing that way.
Reply KiKi L'Angoisse
3:11 PM on July 30, 2011 
LaVerne says...
Marius if it's the proper name then it should be capitalized and just say so in a crit or if the person doing the crit tries to change it then change it back. Remember just b/c someone suggests something doesn't mean you have to explain it or justify why you didn't take the suggestion. It's YOUR story.


And I'm always anxious to read more... :) I think I am going to take a cue from you LaVerne and preface any critiques with these are merely my suggestions.
Reply LaVerne
3:11 PM on July 30, 2011 
Bray Dalton says...
When is it ok to use AND and BUT at the beginning of a sentence? Is there a rule on that?


Not sure about a rule I'd have to check that one myself, but I know most editors I have don't like to see it.
Reply Larken Nicolescu
3:10 PM on July 30, 2011 
Very good question Bray...... *waiting patiently for the answer*

Bray Dalton says...
When is it ok to use AND and BUT at the beginning of a sentence? Is there a rule on that?
Reply LaVerne
3:09 PM on July 30, 2011 
Also this is my personal bible because it's small and easy to carry around but find your own if you don't like this one.

THe Elements of Style by Strunk and White. My husband doesn't like it. lol
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